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Maisie-Jane's avatar

I lived in that part of the world - North Devon and Cornwall - for a little while many years ago.

"my dreams take me back to before

I wish I had known how to give you more "

So evocative ❤️

Suzie's avatar

Thank you Maisie-Jane 🥰❤️ I was in Dorset for years, I would love to move to Cornwall, one day maybe 🥰

Meditations On Permafrost's avatar

Very beautiful, it moves wonderfully.

Suzie's avatar

Thank you so much 🖤🖤🖤

voidlight alchemy (em)'s avatar

Suzie omg.... I'm speechless. gorgeous work.

Suzie's avatar

Em! Thank you! 💕💕💕

Holly's avatar

Oh sweet memories of youth and love this makes me ache for a time in my life as well you always bring it outta me Suzie such a beautiful writer

Suzie's avatar

Olly! Too kind, thank you my lovely 🖤

Anna's avatar

Beautiful

Suzie's avatar

Thank you my love 💖💖

Kala 🦋's avatar

“My dreams take me back to before

I wish I had known how to give you more”

What a LINE! This hit as hard as some of the best stuff on folklore, not even gonna lie

Suzie's avatar

💖💖💖

Petra's avatar

Definitely one of the coolest poems of the week. That simple wish to have known how to give more holds so much weight. <3

Suzie's avatar

Thank you so much Petra 🖤

Petra's avatar

My pleasure <3

Mark Crutchfield's avatar

Wow Suzie. That was a lovely peom, that transported me back to being there last 2 summers. Caught perfectly!

The audio version was beautifully read and really added to the whole peom.

Thank you for both ❤️

Suzie's avatar

So kind 🖤🖤 thank you, Mark X

Aaliya's avatar

I love how you weave nature and emotion together. It’s truly captivating.

Suzie's avatar

You always have such a kind and generous read of my work, so very grateful 💗 much love to you Aaliya

Aaliya's avatar

Much love darling ♥️

N.D. Stone's avatar

You captured the deeper meaning of "poignant" here. Moving.

Suzie's avatar

thank you so much Nancy X

Rev. Kevin T. Taylor's avatar

Suzie, this carries such a vivid ache because North Devon becomes more than a setting; it holds the person, the regret, and the version of love the speaker can only understand in retrospect. The hay bales, salt air, cottage windows, rabbit holes, moths, and wildflower seedlings make the memory feel physical, as though the landscape has kept what the heart could not repair at the time. I was especially moved by “my heart raced ahead,” because it gives the poem that painful sense of love arriving with intensity before it had the wisdom to care well. Grateful for the honesty and sensory beauty of this piece, especially the way the final wish lands without needing to explain itself.

Suzie's avatar

Thank you so much for such a thoughtful read and response, it means a lot to me. Thank you for taking the time 💖

Rev. Kevin T. Taylor's avatar

Suzie, you’re very welcome. The poem made the place feel alive with memory, which is not easy to do without overexplaining the ache. I’m glad the response honored what you placed on the page, and I’m grateful you shared something with so much honesty and atmosphere.

Keiichiro Iwamoto's avatar

Suzie, hello. Everyone has a past where they think, "If only I had done this back then," but perhaps it is because of those experiences that we are who we are today. 😇

Suzie's avatar

Yes, I think we can only learn from them! I wish I had more capability as a young adult though 💕

Keiichiro Iwamoto's avatar

Yes, exactly. If that had been the case, I might have become a more admirable adult. 🥲

Suzie's avatar

You seem a lovely adult to me! 🥰❤️

Keiichiro Iwamoto's avatar

Have an awesome day!😇

ryv 𓆣 ˚ ✶.'s avatar

oh, i don't know how you capture these flashes of memory so intimately. i am in awe of how delicate the details are, and how it leaves me with the quiet dread of wishing we knew more at a time where we didn't. wonderful as usual. 🤍

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ryv, thank you so much for reading and kind words 💖💖💖

Shelley Isabel's avatar

The imagery of a cottage with chicken feathers is so vivid. ❤️

Suzie's avatar

Thank you for reading Shelley 💕💕🥰

HEW(Hue) of Poetry's avatar

Those final two lines..ringing in my head like a fadeout in a song. So good.

Suzie's avatar

🥺🖤 thank you so much Hue x

Micah Ansel's avatar

oh this is magnificent, Suzie!

Suzie's avatar

Too kind my lovely friend 🖤🖤🖤